bladeslad Posted July 28, 2009 Share Posted July 28, 2009 I sat at the introductory press conference with my sheffield united scarf around me. I remebered all the matches i went to with my dad. All the amazing games i saw. I rememberd the 4-3 victory over nottingham forest, the 1-0 victory over arsenal, beating sheffield wednesday home and away. It was now my job to give the young and old fans the same thrills that i had with the team i supported as a child. Wednesday 9th July 2008 my assistant manager is very pleased with the amount of depth we have in our squad. he says the weakest area of our team is the midfield area. The minumum expectation for the team is to reach the play-offs. I have been given a budget of 2 million. Tuesday 9th July 2008 i met up with the media , they asked me a few questions like "is it your dream job" ? etc. Later that day i decided to have a look at and review my squad goalkeepers Paddy Kenny- brilliant keeper, very realible, will need him if we want to go up. Ian Bennett- old, not really in my first team plans but is good back up if kenny gets injured or suspended Justin Haber- not really in my plans, will be looking to loan him out in order to get games Defenders Leigh Bromby- can play rb or cd, want to hold on to him for back up Derek Geary- used as back up Kyle Naughton- one for the futer, high hopes for him Kyle Walker- another future star coming through the ranks, high hopes for him Matt Kilgallon- brilliant defender definatly not going Chris Morgan- quality defender, not for sale for any price Gary Naysmith-left back , with premiership experience, need to keep Greg Halford- can play midfield if needed, only on loan, may sign if he does well Sun Jihai- another player who can play in midfield, back up , looking to sell Ugo Ehiogu- very experienced, back up to first team midfielders Gary Speed- very experienced,but very old, need to keep Nick Montgomery- good midfielder, keeping Lee Hendrie- not really in my plans but will keep in case hes needed David Cotterill- great midfielder, definately not looking to sell Brian Howard- amzing midfielder, need to keep if we want promotion Stephen Quinn- good young midfielder, has a good future with sheffield united ahead of him Strikers Jamie Ward- good young player, one for the future Darious Henderson- big, strong striker, scores as well as sets up goals Arturo Lupoli- only on loan, not really in my plans Billy Sharp- sheffield united lad but only used for back up Danny Webber- not really good enough but will play a fair few games Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
The-Perfect-Fm'er! Posted July 28, 2009 Share Posted July 28, 2009 Fine start, although I will say one thing, all player names should have capitals! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 28, 2009 Author Share Posted July 28, 2009 Wednesday 9th July 2008 No news. Thursday 10th July 2008 No news. Friday 11th July 2008 The League cup first round draw was made and we will be playing against Shrewsbury away. Saturday 12th July 2008 Pre season friendly Ferencvaros Vs Sheffield United 2-2. Goalscorers- Webber,Sharp my team Ian bennett Derek Geary Ugo Ehiogu Kyle Walker Chris Morgan Lee Hendrie Nick Montgomery Stephen Quinn Sun Jihai Billy Sharp Danny Webber subs- haber,Bromby,Naughton,Kilgallon,Naysmith,Halford,Speed,Cotterill,Howard,Ward,Lupoli,Henderson Durugn the game 2 of my key players were injured. Stephen Quinn would only be out of action for 12 days. But Chris Morgans injury was much more serious, he would be out between 4-5 months which will be a huge blow for us. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 28, 2009 Author Share Posted July 28, 2009 Sunday 13th July 2008 no news Monday 14th July 2008 no news Tuesday 15th July 2008 Friendly Matlock town Vs Sheffield United 3-0. scorers- Tahar,Howard,Henderson Team Kenny Naysmith Seck (reserve player) J.Smith (youth team) S.Hall (youth team) Tahar (reserve player) I.Gee (youth team) Howard Halford Henderson Ward subs-Haber,Geary,Walker,Montgomery,Hendrie,Lupoli,Sharp Wednesday 16th July 2008 Made my first signing since taking over as Sheffield United boss, bringing midfielder Dean Sinclair in from Charlton for a fee of 110k Later that day i made my 2nd signing midfielder Franck Moussa from Southend for a fee of 26k Thursday 17th July 2008 no news Friday 18th July 2008 midfielder brian stock joins us from doncaster for a fee of 425k Saturday 19th July 2008 no news Sunday 20th July 2008 no news Monday 21st july 2008 Sun Jihai is out for around 2 weeks Tuesday 22nd July 2008 No news Wednesday 23rd july 2008 no news Thursday 24th July 2008 Signed midfielder Deane Smalley from Oldham for a fee of 90k and he can also play as a striker if needed. Friday 25th July 2008 the odds of us going up are 33-1 Saturday 26th July 2009 I selected the squad numbers for the 2008/9 season Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 28, 2009 Author Share Posted July 28, 2009 Sunday 27th July 2008 Striker Darious Henderson will be out for between 3-4 weeks We have sold 19,000 season tickets so far and we hope to sell another hundred Monday 28th July 2008 no news Tuesday 29th July 2008 no news Wednesday 30th July 2008 I gave the players a normal league and a normal cup bonus Thursday 31st July 2008 no news Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 28, 2009 Author Share Posted July 28, 2009 Friday 1st August 2008 no news Saturday 2nd August 2008 Staylbridge offer to loan nicky travis for 5 months, Loan accepted. Sunday 3rd August 2008 Sun Jihai resumes full training Monday 4th August 2008 I selected my captain which will be Chris Morgan and my vice-captain Paddy Kenny. Nicky Travis moves to staylbridge on a 5 month loan deal Tuesday 5th August 2008 no news Wednesday 6th August 2008 found something weird in the game, it says sun jihai got injured against new zealand under 23s but hes 30 ? Thursday 7th August 2008 no news Friday 8th August 2008 Got invited to the press conferance but sent my assistant saturday 9th August 2008 The day was finaly here. The day when i finally managed a league game with my boyhood team. I felt so proud. I thought back to some of the memorable goals i saw us score, jagielkers screamer against middlesborough, james beatties free kick against sheffield wednesday, paul peschisolidos goal against nottingham forest. then i thought to myself the dreams of these supporters are in my hands. Swansea Vs Sheffield united Team Kenny Geary Naysmith Kilgallon Bromby S.Quinn Stock Speed Cotterill sharp lupoli Subs Bennett Naughton Sinclair (speed 80 mins) Ward (Lupoli 73 mins) Webber (Sharp 64 mins) Score 1-1 Scorers- Stephen Quinn Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
tenthreeleader Posted July 29, 2009 Share Posted July 29, 2009 Wednesday 6th August 2008 found something weird in the game, it says sun jihai got injured against new zealand under 23s but hes 30 ? On 6 Aug 2008 the u-23 teams are playing in the Olympics. Each Olympic squad is allowed three overage players. Nothing weird about it. Welcome to FMS. So how do you feel about managing the Blades? We hear some at the beginning ... what do YOU say? Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Welcome to FMS. So how do you feel about managing the Blades? We hear some at the beginning ... what do YOU say? I feel very proud to manage Sheffield united and I know with me the players will achieve what's capable of them and that is getting promotion back to the premiership. If we don't get promoted our season will be a failure and I would of let the fans down. I also dream of one day when my team will be playing against some of the best teams in Europe. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Sunday 10th August 2008 Derek Geary will be out for around 4 weeks. It is announced that the club have sold 19,000 season tickets for the 2008/9 season. Monday 11th August 2008 no news Tuesday 12th August 2008 no news Wednesday 13th August 2008 League cup 1st round Shrewsbury Vs Sheffield United team Bennett Naysmith Ehiogu Kilgallon Naughton Howard Sinclair Montgomery Smalley Lupoli Ward Subs Kenny Bromby Moussa Webber (ward 78) Sharp (lupoli 45) Cotterill (smalley 89) Halford Score 3-0 Scorers- Lupoli,Sharp,Howard Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Thursday 14th August 2008 No news Friday 15th August 2008 No news Saturday 16th August Sheffield United Vs Nottingham Forest Team Kenny Naysmith Kilgallon Walker Naughton S.Quinn Howard Stock Cotterill Webber Lupoli Subs Bennett Bromby Sinclair (Cotterill 80) Sharp (Webber 73) Ward Score 2-1 scorers Cotterill, S.quinn Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Sunday 17th August 2008 Justin Haber moves to Malmo ff on loan for 5 months Monday 18th August 2008 Striker Darius Henderson resumes full training Tuesday 19th August 2008 No news Wednesday 20th August 2008 No news Thursday 21st August 2008 No news Friday 22nd August 2008 No news Saturday 23rd August 2008 Ipswich Vs Sheffield united Team Kenny Naysmith Kilgallon Walker Naughton S.quinn Howard Stock Cotterill Henderson Webber Subs Bennett Bromby Sinclair (Cotterill 72) Sharp (Stock (85) Ward (Webber 67) Score 0-0 Scorers- None Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Sunday 24th August 2008 Striker Danny Welbeck joins on loan until the end of the season. Monday 25th August 2008 No news Tuesday 26th August 2008 no news Wednesday 27th August 2008 League cup 2nd round Sheffield United vs Burnley Team Kenny Naysmith Kilgallon Bromby Naughton S.Quinn Sinclair Stock Halford Welbeck Henderson Subs Bennett Walker Geary Montgomery (Stock 60 mins) Howard Sharp Webber (Welbeck 75) Score 4-0 Scorers-Henderson 2, Naughton, halford, Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Blade25 Posted July 29, 2009 Share Posted July 29, 2009 Good luck mate interesting reading, think you'll need a great deal more in the transfer market to get United up though. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
SCIAG Posted July 29, 2009 Share Posted July 29, 2009 A few things: Capital letters at the start of sentences! After a comma, or indeed any punctuation mark bar an opening bracket, you need a space. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Thursday 28th august 2008 midfielder Lee hendrie moves to Norwich for a fee of 300k Gary taylor-fletcher moves to Sheffield United for a fee of 300k. Friday 29th August 2008 Defender Seb hines joins on loan for 3 months Saturday 30th August 2008 Bristol City Vs Sheffield United Team Kenny Naysmith Kilgallon Walker Naughton S.quinn Taylor-Fletcher Stock Cotterill Welbeck Henderson Subs Bennett Hines Sinclair (Stock 68) Sharp (Welbeck 73) Lupoli (Henderson 73) Score 0-2 Scorers- none Sunday 31st August 2008 No news Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Monday 1st September 2008 Striker Danny webber is out for 14 days Tuesday 2nd September 2008 no news Wednesday 3rd september 2008 No news Wednesday 4th september- Friday 12th September 2008 no important news Saturday 13th September 2008 Sheffield United Vs Southampton Team Kenny Naysmith Hines Kilgallon Naughton S.Quinn Taylor-Fletcher Stock Halford Welbeck Sharp Subs Bennett Bromby Cotterill (Halford 82) Ward Henderson (Sharp 45) Score 1-0 Scorers-Stock Sunday 14th September 2008 Danny Webber resumes full training Monday 15th September 2008 No news Tuesday 16th September 2008 Burnley Vs Sheffield United Team Kenny Naysmith Hines Kilgallon Naughton S.Quinn Taylor-Fletcher Stock Halford Welbeck Henderson Subs Bennett Bromby Cotterill (Halford 50) Ward (Henderson 65) Webber (Henderson 90) Score 3-2 Scorers- Henderson, S.quinn, Cotterill Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 From now on im just going to give you the results of the games instead of going through all the days because it takes too long and i bet its a bit boring for you all Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Saturday 20th September 2008 Sheffield United Vs Wolves Team Kenny Geary Hines Kilgallon Naughton S.Quinn Stock Howard Cotterill Henderson Ward Subs Bennett Bromby Taylor-Fletcher (Howard 79) Sharp Lupoli (Ward 62) Score 2-2 Scorers- Henderson, Howard Wednesday 24th September 2008 League cup 3rd round Sheffield United Vs Fulham Team Kenny Geary Hines Kilgallon Naughton S.Quinn Stock Howard Cotterill Henderson Webber Subs Bennett Bromby Taylor-Fletcher (S.Quinn 87) Sharp (Henderson 60) Lupoli (Webber 77) Moussa Sinclair Score 1-0 Scorers- Stock Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Manxie_Ash Posted July 29, 2009 Share Posted July 29, 2009 Not in the slightest bit boring We are all about the detail up in here! Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terk Posted July 29, 2009 Share Posted July 29, 2009 Yeah, a team list, result and scorers isn't a story unfortunately. What you were doing before was borderline, but just had enough detail to classify as what we expect from a story, your last post doesn't. If you want to continue posting like you have in your last post, then I suggest the career update forum is better suited Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Saturday 27th September 2008 Plymouth Vs Sheffield United Team Kenny Naysmith Hines Kilgallon Naughton S.Quinn Stock Howard Cotterill Henderson Welbeck Subs Bennett Geary Sinclair (Stock 72) Sharp (Henderson 60) Lupoli Score- 2-0 Scorers- Cotterill, Welbeck This was Danny welbecks last game of his loan spell after Sheffield United send him back. Saturday 4th Ocotber 2008 Sheffield United Vs Reading Team Kenny Naysmith Hines Kilgallon Naughton S.Quinn Stock Howard Cotterill Henderson Sharp Subs Bennett Bromby Taylor-Fletcher (Cotterill 67) Ward Webber (Sharp 85) Score 1-0 Scorers- Kilgallon Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
viperk1 Posted July 29, 2009 Share Posted July 29, 2009 Are you even reading the comments that people are giving you? In all honesty, this was never a story to begin with - though as Terk said, what you were doing before was borderline as to what is accepted. You may deem what I am about to say as harsh - but it is the truth, whether you like it or not. First of all, as Terk initially said, what you are doing now is not a story - all I see is a bunch of results, which tell me absolutely nothing about your formation, or any detail whatsoever regarding, say, how a goal was scored. Secondly, your grammar at the start of your story is absolutely atrocious - at least capitalise the start of your sentences, for goodness sake! Proper nouns are also a problem - since when does "Saturday" start with a small s? Finally - stop rushing. I know you're probably keen to tell us the results of your matches with Sheffield United, but if you continually keep posting new sections half an hour at a time...some people just don't want to bother reading a story from the beginning to say, page 3 on this board. Keep going, and that is what you'll end up with - and not a lot of readers If you want advice, all I can possibly say is take a look at mark wilson27's stories - they are written in a similar vein to what you're trying to do, and I am certain that it would help you improve your writing on this board. If not, like Terk said earlier, I'd recommend you look at the FM Career Thread a little lower down. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
bladeslad Posted July 29, 2009 Author Share Posted July 29, 2009 Ok Thanks for the advice. Could someone close this thread and I will start a new story from scratch after ive had a look at some other peoples stories to give me ideas. thank you Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
Terk Posted July 29, 2009 Share Posted July 29, 2009 bladeslad, we run a seven day rule in FMS, which means that you can't start a new story within seven days of starting your last one. So you can start your new effort next Tuesday. That should give you plenty of time to read around and see what is expected. Like viper said, I would recommend mark wilson's stories, as well as Faramir's. Link to post Share on other sites More sharing options...
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